Cpt. Smurf

Eragon proves that it really isn't the quality of the book that makes it a bestseller, it's the marketing. I've read YA fantasy books that are a million times better ...

Although I didn't really see much of the allegorical meaning to it. Maybe I'm just an idiot XD

Yeah, I've seen quotes by Paolini. It's one thing to be totally full of yourself and be a talented writer. It's another thing all together to be totally full of ...

And uh, Paolini actually intentionally made it cliched. Or at least I read that somewhere on his site. It's easy to say you made it "intentionally cliched" after the majority ...

Lyra's Oxford was slightly irritating. The damn shortness, and the fact that it came to no resolution annoyed me. Grrr. The Book of Dust should be out in a year ...

Thanks for critiquing, glad you liked it. As for why the wolves attacked, that will be explained later on, as I have decided to continue this into a novel. It ...

The Hobbit and LOTR are two seperate things. The Hobbit is the prequel, if you like, to LOTR. Fellowship of the Ring is the first in LOTR, followed by Two ...

Yes, you're right, the stupidity of that boy was unbelievable. I found that quite degrading, that the author thinks that a child that is so obsessed with, well, you know, ...

Also, on further reading, I'm finding them quite patronising. I get the feeling that Mr Shan is trying to be all "cool" and stuff, but it's not working. I like ...

I feel that Harry Potter is a very good at being a plain book, nothing more. You can read it, its enjoyable and takes no mental effort. However, the extra ...

Dreamer and flytodreams: thanks for your comments, glad you liked it! I changed all the necessary typos, although I think the British spelling of 'traveler' is spelt 'traveller', so I've ...

Wow, thanks for the comments! I'm gonna edit right away! Well, I hadn't originally planned this as a prologue, more of a one-off thing really, but now maybe I will ...

Sounds like it could be good, tell us when something happens!!

The reason for that would be 'sort of' explained later on in the book. At least, the reader would know why, but they wouldn't. :? Not making myself very clear, ...

The "acting as though" really gives away the next sentence, I think, when it could have been more of a surprise. Instead maybe mention what he did to make it ...